Senior Home Alarm

I feel that there are lots of flaws with my essays, as in I didn’t elaborate on the part I should’ve elaborated. here’s the essay topic:
Rutgers University is a vibrant community of people with a wide variety of backgrounds and experiences. How would you benefit from and contribute to such an environment? Consider variables such as your talents, travels, leadership activities, volunteer services, and cultural experiences. Only personal essays submitted via our website will be considered.
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The centerpiece, an exquisite white triple-layer cake with neatly formed roses on each layer caught my eyes when I passed the La Bonbonierre bakery. The origin of the cake, its history, and the labor taken to mold this sophisticated piece immediately entered my mind as I imagined the usual ingredients of the cake, such as eggs, milk, and sugar. After marveling over the work, I left the shop and continued strolling down the street toward my house. I came across another shop, though its windows were a bit unkempt with encrusted flour. It was the typical bakery you would find in a local town. In the display case, I saw a little boy reach out to decorate his own triple-layer cake. However, these layers were not smooth and the cake seemed to sit in a slanted position, almost like a replica of the Leaning Tower of Pisa. The cars that he made on the cake looked like red blobs and the rest of the design of the cake was unflattering. Amused by the scene, I proceeded to leave.
The sightings of the strikingly different cakes came back to mind while I was working on my daily tasks. The disparity between them provoked a strong feeling in me and I wanted to show it. My instinct was to draw and paint something that connects these “neighbors”. However, I could not figure out what this relationship could be. Nevertheless, I ventured to make this creation happen.
When I eventually discovered the story I needed, it was time to transfer it into image form. On one side of the painting, I painted milk cartons, a bag of sugar, eggs, a bottle of vanilla extract, bags of flour, and other ingredients of a cake lying on top of one another to create a massive hill. This “cake” sat in the familiar display case of the little boy. The cake’s attention was directed through the window to a beautiful cake sitting in a bakery across the street. My concept was to show the desire of the first cake to look as remarkable as its neighbor does. Standing back, I noticed that I could pull out another perspective from the painting.
Society is similar to this cake, in which everyone is like the constituent ingredients of it. Each ingredient has its own unique flavors and has different origins, but these varieties are what make the cake, the community, interesting and diverse. In such an environment, I gain insight into many types of people, which aids me in forming better judgments and being more impartial. As a senior on the girls cross country team and having spent three years in indoor and outdoor track, I have seen various personalities, encouraged my underclassmen, and been even inspired by some of the individuals as well. Surrounding myself with dissimilar persons allows me to learn not only the discrepancies in the cultures, but also how they all share a key element. Noticing these commonalities is one component, but experiencing the different ways to express the same message is another. I have found myself smiling when I participated in track meets, volleyball games, scrawling away numbers in math league, and even while watching a movie in history class. Each situation carries its own emotions, and I believe I can benefit by applying not just my knowledge and research, but the fervor I gain that would add the final touch to my education.
For such a multicultural environment, I can be a positive ingredient to this mass. Like the little boy, I am a diligent person and I try to understand thoroughly for myself rather than for points. From work to art class, I noticed the harsh realities of life, such as demanding customers, and I’ve learned to build tolerance and accept all kinds of ideas. I like developing concepts in creative ways and incorporate the activities I experience with others to enhance these ideas. Moreover, I would contribute to the community by embracing its diversity and adding in my own taste.

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